1st Edited Lesson...Arturo asks for help.Want to see the Arturo's 1st edited letter? Have you read the unedited version first? Make sure to read that version before you read the edited version of his letter.You have made your own corrections to his letter right? I hope so. :) Now what? Now you can see my corrections and suggestions in the 1st edited lesson of the writing lessons. If you don't understand everything on this page, translate the page into your native language, with the "google translator" below. [Make sure you address the person...Diana] I need some help from you!! [You could also say: I need your help!] I currently live in Mexico. In the near future I plan to move to the US. I started my undergraduate degree about 10 years ago but the economy in Mexico was not doing so well and I had to quit school. (Private education is very expensive and school loans, either do not exist or the interest rates are outrageous; so you basically have to come from a wealthy family or pay in cash). Now that I have a more reliable economy [If you are taking about yourself you would say 'income'...if you are taking about the 'economy' you would want to say..."Now that WE have a more reliable economy".] I decided to continue my education, but instead of (remove "finishing") getting my diploma from a Mexican University, I decided to transfer my credits to a US [an American] college [or you could say " a collage in the states"] and now I am taking on-line classes from community colleges and from the University of Massachusetts (which is my final destination after I collect the required credits from other schools). The reason that I am writing to [you don't need 'to' here] you is because I have serious problems :) with my [don't need 'with my'] writing in English, I always get [remove "get"] panic when I have to write a report at work, an essay at school or even a simple e-mail. It is painful!!! I have lots of problems choosing the wording, whether it is: ing, ed; if I need to place a dash or when I need to add "up" "in" (sign-in sign-up, etc), organizing my ideas... you know, little things that are simple but makes [remove the "s"] me hesitate when typing. So, I was wondering if you know of any sites [You have to make the noun agree with 'any'..plural plural] or anybody where I can get help with my grammar and writing. I guess what I am looking for is help composing essays or simple paragraphs and then having somebody (or people, say a forum) where I can receive continuous evaluations providing me with guidelines and basics of grammar. I have looked into several [ "websites" is one word] already, but it seems that the common way to charge is per session, which doesn't really work for me because I would like something where I can have continual feedback. I think I need something where I can learn to write academic documents, type, type, type and then receive feedback. What do you think? What is your suggestion? What do you suggest? Found a mistake that I didn't in this 1st edited letter? Send in your corrections so that everyone can improve from these writing lessons. Click for the next assignement: # 2
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