2nd Edited Letter...Arturo introduces himself moreWant to see the Arturo's 2nd edited letter? Did you read and correct unedited version first? Make sure to read that version before you read the edited version. Here is Arturo's 2nd edited email. If you don't understand everything on this page, translate the page into your native language, with the "google translator" below. Dianita Torres :) (I decided to make it plural because it sounds more common), I want to start by saying THANK YOU! It is a very kind offer and of course I am taking it. [or you could say "I'm going to take you up on it. Take you up on something...means to accept an offer and is a great phrasal verb] I wasn't really expecting that! I was reading your background in on your website, and it is really surprising how passionate you are for about English, you seem to be an interesting person. What motivated you to start a website like that this? I have a sister who lives in Toronto [do you have more than one? If you only have one you should say My sister lives] , she is being has been there for about 15 years now. She also have has plans to move to the US; standing the cold is not easy, as you may know. You have to be very brave by moving to move to other another country and leaving leave your family in Canada. Do you have any plans to do a postgraduate or further studies? Regarding your help, every essay that I have done have has been reviewed by native English speakers and I never kept the original versions, so it wouldn't be a [remove the 'a' because material is uncountable] reliable material that could to give you a good perspective idea of my common errors mistakes. Do you have any alternate plan an alternative that we could use way to start? You mentioned something of about posting my writing and have having other people also commenting and correcting them. Do you think we could start by doing something like that? [New paragraph for new ideas...easier to read :)] Just to give you a [remove 'a'] more of about my background, I have been working in the Information Technology field for over 13 years, I started running last year, and I haven't stopped running ever since then [remove 'then']; so you can imagine how much I love it. I also started studying and educating myself about natural health. I'm always trying to keep my body healthy and reading something new new things about healthy lifestyles. By only running and eating healthy I lost about 15 kg. I also like history although I am not so good at it because I have an awful memory. Those are some of my interests. Do you think we could use them as an a base for you to decide subjects or readings (?) and perhaps start from there... I am only brainstorming and I am not sure what would be the best way to start. When I was little I used to have 3 imaginary friends that I always played with: Jifes (he was almost like superman), Yoyo (he had the a peaceful personality) and Susu (there is always have to be There always has to be a woman to balance things out and give a different perspective to the guys), my best friend was Jifes. I am 34 and I still play with him and in many cases I use his name as pseudonym in forums or writings. Once again I appreciate your willing willingness to help me.
-Arturo. 2nd Edited letter Tip #1 *Make sure you put the before US. The United States. 2nd Edited letter Tip #2 *Also the difference between another and other. Another means additional. "Give me another coke please" vs other which means different "Give me the other bottle of coke that is on the table." Return to the WRITING WORKSHOP for another exercise
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