2nd Writing Lesson...more information about ArturoEveryone has been waiting for the 2nd writing lesson and it is finally here. In this lesson Arturo thanks me for helping him and also gives me more information about himself. Can you see his mistakes?If you don't understand everything on this page, translate the page into your native language, with the "google translator" below. Dianita Torres :) (I decided to make it plural because it sounds more common), I want to start saying THANK YOU! It is a very kind offer and of course I am taking it. I wasn't really expecting that! I was reading your background in your website, and it is really surprising how passionate you are for English, you seem to be an interesting person. What motivated you to start a website like that? I have a sister who lives in Toronto, she is being there for about 15 years now. She also have plans to move to US; standing the cold is not easy as you may know. You have to be very brave by moving to other country and leaving your family in Canada, do you have any plans to do a postgraduate or further studies? Regarding your help, every essay that I have done have been reviewed by native English speakers and I never kept the original versions, so it wouldn't be a reliable material that could give you a good perspective of my common errors and language. Do you have any alternate plan that we could use to start? You mentioned something of posting my writings and have other people also commenting and correcting them. Do you think we could we start by doing something like that? Just to give you a more of my background, I have been working in the Information Technology field for over 13 years, started running last year, and haven't stopped running since then, so you can imagine how much I love it. I also started studying and educating myself about natural health, always trying to keep my body healthy and reading something new about healthy lifestyle. Only by running and eating healthy I lost about 15 kg. I also like history although I am not so good at it because I have an awful memory. Those are some of my interests. Do you think we could use them as an base for you to decide subjects or readings (?) and perhaps start from there... I am only brainstorming and I am not sure what would be the best way to start. When I was little I use to have 3 imaginary friends that I always played with: Jifes (he was almost like superman), Yoyo (he had the peaceful personality) and Susu (there is always have to be a woman to balance and give a different perspective to the guys), my best friend was Jifes. I am 34 and I still play with him and in many cases I use his name as pseudonym in forums or writings. Once again I appreciate your willing to help me. Te mando un fuerte abrazo desde el nuevo mundo. -Arturo 2nd Writing Lesson Side Note: The only thing I changed in this email was adding paragraphs. When Arturo wrote me before it was all in one block and difficult to read. More white space makes it easier to read 2nd Writing Lesson Tip: Just like in the 1st lesson, divide your writing in to paragraphes. If you change the subject, put it in a new paragraph. It make it much more organized and easier to read. :) What MISTAKES did I find in the letter? Click here to see the EDITED letter!
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