IELTS Essay Practice

by Krishanthan
(Sri lanka)

My IELTS Practice Essay.

Currently, computer technology is moving In modern technology computer beyond the human mind to the future. In our modern computerized society, every human must is dependent on a computer. In that case Day by day technology makes many things possible as well.

In the next future generations, the number of Robots will increase. Robots can do work themselves without any human controls and work can be do similar as human. For instance if we want to make a cup of tea, your voice only will be enough to make it automatically. After returning from work we might be able to see a robot finishing the housework as well. This is all possible after came from office we could see that robot will finish all the works as well.

Another idea is automatic cars. Humans wouldn't need to drive, except for giving directions only need to where we want to go. Then it would automatically locate the place and it will drop you off. One advantage of this being the ability to from this advantage we can save time while travelling.

On the other hand, automatic home systems where all the household controls; including the electric switches, water, doors and window controls, would be asministered by a computer. In one sitting place we could control the whole home. In fact we could make a security system for our home. Suppose we forgot to shut the window. In the future our house might be able to analyze and shut it automatically. Basically, computers will protect our home without any harmful actions.

In conclusion, my point is obvious. The future depends on computers and it will remain a good thing. Nevertheless, some people think there are some suspicious points regarding computers. In fact, it is likely that the next generation of computers future will extend beyond the human mind, no doubt about it.

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I did this essay writing within 45 Minutes, My essay topic is it correct?

And please tell me my writing knowledge, How much do I want improve...Thanks

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Hi Krishanthan,

Thank you for sending in your practice essay.

First of all, yes your essay topic is correct. I would suggest planning the structure of your essay a bit more though. I think that you could improve your essay a great deal by organizing it into three parts. Try to have a clear introduction, body section and conclusion.

Say what you are going to say
Say it
Say what you said.

Also, you need to be careful with your sentence structure and make sure you are saying what you want to say clearly and directly.

When you are planning your essay try to keep things simple and then when you have an idea of what you are going to write, try to introduce more information to prove what you are saying.

My suggestion for how to prepare would be to keep writing. You should be writing everyday. Just choose a topic from the newspaper and write a paragraph about it. Talk about the new American President, talk about weight loss, talk about gas prices, talk about yoga...just write every day.

The more you write the better you will get. :)
Keep coming back each Wednesday to do the writing exercises. I think doing this as well will help you, because you will recieve feedback from me and other visiters.

Have a great day!
-Diana