Network down

by Dorris
(Laguna, Philippines)

In my work, yesterday, it was not good day for me. I was came from my two days vacation because my son was sick.


We have trouble encountered with our network connection(Internet/Email). Since 9:45pm May 26 up to 14:44pm of May 27.

From time to time, I was following up the status of our problem to our line provider but according to them the trouble was a major problem they need to replaced parts of the machine and it tooks a long time. What a good day.

As a network administrator trouble is a part of our job, but is was totally gave upset and business loss because of this downtime. But this is not controllable.

When the network was started to run in 30 mins. no turning on or off I started to smile. So right after the network was totally normal working. I am now happy and no past heart beathing.

So I would say that my day yesterday was unforgettable problem that "I learned from this experiences." Always said the Lesson Learn.

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Jun 04, 2009
Thanks for the comment
by: Pam

Hi Dorris,
It was a pleasure to edit your story, to do it helps me so much.

About your question, at this moment, I am not the right person to make any comment about it.
Thanks
Elsa
Hi Dorris and Elsa, I am so excited. This is exactly the interaction that I wanted to happen on the site. People helping and being helped. I LOVE IT!

As Elsa doesn't feel that it is her place to comment about your writing, I thought I would step in and give my "2 cents" or opinion. I have two suggestions for you Dorris;

1) Watch out for your articles. Make sure that you use "a" or "the" when necessary. They are small words but they really do make a difference in communicating.

2) Watch out for "double negatives".

I was came from my two days vacation because my son was sick.

I came from my...

When the network was started to run in 30 mins. no turning on or off I started to smile.

When the network started to run...

Keep up the great work Dorris and remember to keep writing. It is the best way to improve! - Diana

Jun 03, 2009
Thanks for the comment
by: Anonymous

Hi Pam,
Thanks for your comments.
For you what is my common error, in what part of speech is my problem. What should I give more time to focus.


May 29, 2009
Network down
by: Majid

I didn't have a good day in at my work yesterday.
When coming back from my two days vacation off, I realized that my son was sick. We had trouble connecting with our network connection (Internet/Email). Since from9:45pm on May 26 to 14:44pm of onMay 27. From time to time, I was following followedup on the status of our problem to with our line provider but according to them, the trouble problemwas a major problem in which they needed to replace parts of the machine (OR the problem was so great that parts of the machines need to be replaced good suggestion!!) and it took a long time. What a good day.

As a network administrator, trouble is a part of my job, but the downtime totally made me upset and almost made us loose business. brought me on the verge of business loss . But this was out of my control. not controllable.
When the network started to run in 30 mins later , I started to smile. So right after the network was totally working normally, I was happy and without the past heart beating and my heart stopped racing.

So I would say, that yesterday's problem was such an unforgettably troublesome and that "I have learned some lessons from the experiences."

I'd like to thank Diana in advance for her corrections.
Great work everyone! I am so happy that people are starting to edit other people's stories. We are really starting to help one another. This is wonderful! Keep up the great work! - Diana

May 28, 2009
Network down
by: Pam

Yesterday in my work was not a good day for me. I came back after two days off, because my son was sick.

We had trouble with our network connection (Internet/Email), since from May 26 at 9:45 up to May 27 at 14:44 pm.

From time to time, I was following followed up on the status of our problem with our line provider. According to them, the trouble was a major problem, and they had need to replace parts of the machine and it will would take a long time; what a good day!!.

As a network administrator, handling problems troubles is a part of our job, but this problem gave us total upset and loss to the business caused us to loose business due to the downtime, but this is not controllable
was out of our hands/out of our control/unavoidable.
When the network started to run in 30 mins. later, I started to smile because the network was working normally. Now I feel happy, and no more beating heart my heart isn't racing anymore.

So I would say that yesterday was an unforgettable day for me and that "I learned from this experience."
Great job Pam! Thanks for taking the time to add your corrections! - Diana

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