The Internet: According to Yassin.
by Yassin
(Morocco)
I'm sending to you this new essay about the Internet. In fact, it took me houres to write it. I hope to receive your good correction and strong suggestions. Also, thank you very very much for your fruitful correction of my last essay.
Hi Yassin,
Here is your essay!! Sorry for the long wait. Also, this essay was a bit longer than normal so it took longer to edit. I have to stop and say GREAT WORK! What a wonderful essay Yassin. I am impressed. :D *High Five!* I have made some changes which you will note below and here are some comments:
1) We say
the Internet...always with "the"
2) There isn't a number 2! That was the only common mistake that you made. The rest is just a bit of grammar and word choice. WELL DONE!
I've very happy with your progress Yassin!
All the be
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THE INTERNET
Many questions run
in through the minds of new users of
the Internet about its purpose, definition, and history; and they
will quickly discover its amazing benefits as well as its ugly drawbacks.
Generally speaking the Internet is
commonly considered
as one of the fastest communication networks
in the world. It provides wonderful and interesting services. On
the other hand
as it services positively, it services negativelyit serves some negative purposes as well.
This taken into concideration, proves that this requires a good and wise use of the internet
is required.
The Internet as it is defined by its specialists, is a global network of interconnected computers that facilitates sharing information between
different users of
the internet. The main purpose of
inventing the Internet
invention was to spread information between geographically scattered computers and to control
a nuclear attack by United States of America. (REALLY....INTERESTING!!) For this reason,
the US established
the Advanced Research Projects Agency Networks in 1969. After that,
the Internet
has becomebecame accessible to
the public, and its purpose has developed
into multi-functional services.
As the internet became available to
the public, many hard and difficult things have been, to some extent, overcome or reduced. Due to this advanced technology,
the access to the internet gives birth to many advantages; for example, communication is the main target of
the Internet; it allows making global relationships and chatting with beloved people around the world. Information, perhaps, is the important advantage of the Internet because Google, Yahoo, and other sites provide
the users
by a with plenty of information regarding law, marketing, conferences, history and to
name a few. Entertainment is another advantage if
it is not the
most popular one,
because as many people prefer to surf the internet in order to download games, visit
ing chat rooms, and listen
ing to music. In addition to this, there are so many other interests and services, such as online banking, job seeking, and purchasing tickets; without forgetting e-commerce and e-books.
However, the internet brings disadvantages and dangers towards mankind
as well. Some of these disadvantages and drawbacks are: stealing personal information by
chrackers like credit card number
s, spamming;
the sending
of e-mails to cheat people
by providing them with unreal news, and
virus threats
destruct functioning of computer system.
Another disadvantage and
the a dangerous one
at that, is pornography, which targets childrens mental health
life as well
as it chang
esing and distor
ting the reputation, morality, and mentality of women and men into
a mere
illegal sexual and
sometimes illegal activities. In addition to pornography, addiction is another danger because there are many
users of internet
users that sit infront of the computer for no less than five hours
at a time which can cause health problems. (I SIT AT THE COMPUTER ALL DAY!!! hmmmm)
For these factors,
Taking these facts into conciderarion one has to think about the appropriate way to profit from internet and avoid its drawbacks. First, everyone should learn about
and be aware of the dangers and drawbacks of
the Internet. Second,
for parents should
control monitor their children. Third, every user of
the Internet should organize his or her time
wisely and not
giving all time to the internet?spend all their free time on the Internet. Fifth, there should be laws that provide
s security
to users and
punishesharsh punishments for all who tr
iesy to
transgressviolate this security.
In conclusion,
the Internet is one of the
excellent best invent
ions was ever created and developed
throughout history because of its uncountable advantages.
Nevertheless,
but its disadvantages calls for carefulness and a
well good self-control in access
ing to the internet.
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